I am a student at Ōtaki College in Ōtaki, NZ. My blog is a place where I will be able to share some of my learning. Please note....some work won't be edited - they are just my first drafts, so there may be some errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas on my posts.
Hello Irangi, I'm Lucy from Paroa School. This post looks really cool because of the drawings. The poem is really nice and simple, it's catchy and isn't too long of confusing. To be BTB (Better Than Before) you could fix the inconsistenty of the "Help!"s. They should all have quotation marks (") on either side of the word Help!. Another thing you could change to make it BTB (Better Than Before) would be adding a caption to explain why you made this. Keep up the good work! Lucy
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Hello Irangi, I'm Lucy from Paroa School.
ReplyDeleteThis post looks really cool because of the drawings. The poem is really nice and simple, it's catchy and isn't too long of confusing. To be BTB (Better Than Before) you could fix the inconsistenty of the "Help!"s. They should all have quotation marks (") on either side of the word Help!. Another thing you could change to make it BTB (Better Than Before) would be adding a caption to explain why you made this. Keep up the good work!
Lucy